Talk:Veras

(Hopefully this is the right place.) So far I can't say much about the content, so it's all boring grammatical proofreading: --Earthsprite 13:21, 20 June 2006 (BST)
 * "hold a complacent posture" - holds
 * "comfertable" - comfortable
 * "tounge" - tongue
 * "recieved" - received
 * "the second involves bloodshed. Though..." - the second involves bloodshed, though... ? This makes a long sentence, so it could be instead: the second involves bloodshed. However...
 * "He was however, born." - He was, however, born.
 * "I occured..." - It occured (the birth?)
 * "I occured in the northlands, up in a small farmland community, or more accurately near it, just south of the Alterac Mountain range." - I can't put my finger on what exactly makes me read this sentence over. Maybe: It occurred in the northlands, near a small farmland community, just south of the Alterac Mountain range. ?
 * "Raised in the turmoil of a deep, complicated family tradition his youth is a matter few risk delving into, and those that do have the scars to prove it." - Raised in the turmoil of a deep, complicated family tradition, his youth is a matter few risk delving into; those that do have the scars to prove it. Complex sentences ftw! I hope that works.
 * "Little is known about the so called cult Veras's father used in his training of his son, this much is known though, Veras was raised not as a child, but a sword sharpened, and to this day he carries the edge." - Wahh! so-called; What does "cult used in his training of his son" mean?; Sentence structure! What about: Bla bla bla training of his son. This much is known though: Veras was raised not as a child, but as a sharpened sword, and to this day he carries the edge.